Levelling Sheet

Recount Sample

Peeeew!!! peeew!!! peeew!! the fireworks flew high into the pitch black, night sky. The fireworks sounded like missiles were being shot all over the sky. It lit up the sky with blue, red, yellow and other colors. It looked as if paint was being splashed. Roger stood there amazed at the sight with his Uncle, Nan, Mum and little Brother.

“Let’s light some on the road” said his uncle Tyrone

Roger grabbed the lighter and some little guy fawkes. He set off these little circle ones and put them on the road. He seen them starting to spin like balls of fire. They dashed all over the road.

“Wow!!! those ones are cool” said Zack as he sat down on the grass in amazement.

I seen our neighbours lighting there ones up too. Boof!! Boof!!! Boof!!! they sounded like gunshots.

“Let’s get the sparklers” said Mum.

She lit ours up and gave us one each. Roger was trying to pretend that he had a wand. He was acting like I was doing spells on Zack. Later on We grabbed the roman candles out of the box of fireworks. Zack held one and my uncle set it off. It glided into the sky and exploded into a fiery explosion. His Uncle Tyrone grabbed another roman candle and set it off. Again it made a huge outburst as it blasted through the sky.

As the night went on we had run low on guy fawkes. That night was a really fun night with my whanau and we got to spend so much fun with them. We had fun seeing guy fawkes all over the sky and ground. That’s a night we will never forget.

My assessment of this writing:

Element	Rubric	Comment
Ideas	6	Because his ideas are deliberately selected, effective and elaborated upon. His elaboration is detailed. His main idea is focused.
Structure and Language	5	Because the structure of his writing is appropriate to what he is writing about and is expanded upon, to the point AND so are the language features he am using.
Organisation	6	Because his paragraphs support the development of the text. Sub headings, topic sentences and linking words are present and appropriate
Vocabulary	6	Because he has used precise language choices consistently to enhance meaning and/or mood. He has deliberately used  precise vocabulary (missiles, amazement, outburst)
Sentence Structure	5	His sentences are controlled and show variety in structure, length and type and have extended phrases and/or clauses.
Punctuation	5	He uses correct sentence punctuation AND correct use of other punctuation (direct speech, apostrophes, exclamation marks)
Spelling	6	He spells high-frequency and a range of difficult words with few or no errors

Total score: 39

Level 5p